davlin (3rd Sep 2010 18:52)

You've captured the western style excellently and put together skillfully. I agree with previous comments about costumes and locations...fantastic. I would like to see full version of this western adventure.

Tarn (1st Sep 2010 10:15)

I agree with Avenging Eagle. There's certainly potential here - your costumes and locations are amazing. I'd say your actors are decent for this scale of production, but some of the dialogue was indeed rather cliched. I think this is probably highlighted by some of the title cards. For example, juxtaposing a title card of 'REGRET' with a character saying "I feel regret!" is unintentionally quite funny. Without the title card, the line would have worked better. You've got some great looking footage here, though. If you run some grading over it - nothing too extreme - then you'll have something that looks fantastic.

Sollthar (1st Sep 2010 10:15)

The locations are sweet and the costumes and props are cool, kudos for those. Great to see a proper horse and a western setting. I love westerns! That said, the trailer totally doesn't work and even had me lough out loud at some places, to be honest. It's just hilariously bad at times. The part where the text says "a story of betrayal" and then there's a shot of someone yelling "YOU BETRAYED ME" literally had me laughing. It was like Plan 9 from outer space bad. I was waiting for "LOVE" and then a "I love you" line and "REVENGE" and a following "By Grabthars hammer, I will avenge thee" line or "ACTION" and then a shot of someone firing at a rock. It's just... funny. Your writing and acting is the greatest weakness. There is no genuine emotion in this, just wooden and stilted dialogue. I also can't get any sort of story from the trailer. There's nothing there that makes this interesting apart from the fact you have neat costumes and a good location, but those don't make a good film. Your cinematography is okay, but also seems to deliver rather standard fare. Why don't you have a closer look at some of the great westerns and their shot layout? I would have given it a 3 for the costumes, location and the horse, but the fact you immediately jump on your own movie and give your own movie 5 stars makes that a 2. Sorry, doesn't work like that.