FXhomer32915 (23rd Aug 2010 04:10)

Sollthar is right. You have a good build-up to …nothing. First of all, use a more digital-looking font. After all, the film is about technology (see the opening credits of Wargames.) Also, you can dramaticize the titling by making a fly-away sequence over the viewer’s head, then the title flies IN from over the viewers’head. The initial shots are good, but as the music builds, so should the timing of the shots. Once the music is a full-gallop, we should be assaulted with actions shots all hinting at, but not giving away, the story. At this point, this is not a trailer.

Paradox Pictures (19th Aug 2010 14:44)

My only suggestion is that you use a different font than the default. I was pulled in to the movie until that first title. Otherwise good job.

JOfxmuschst (16th Aug 2010 07:35)

Thanks for the comment... Yes its true the exposure of some of the shots is in a lot of ways to much. I did not realised the problem with the editing first, but yes, its also true. Again, thank you for the nice comment!