Sollthar (5th May 2009 17:54)

I do like some of the camerawork. Not all of it, but some of the images worked well and were appropriately moody. The editing had the right pace and the black and white worked good with the video too. What didn't work for me, was the text. Not the content of it, not the lyrics themselves, but the way it was cheaply superimposed onto the video. That just killed all the atmosphere and looked really, really cheap. Text is something difficult with film. A film is no book, it's an audio-visual media. And it works with things that are hearable or visible, that's what film is all about. Having to read text in a film is always a bad thing since text is nothing filmic, but if you have to work with text, you need to think of it as part of the films visuals and do something with it, chose the perfect font, frame your shot so the text fits into it perfectly, animate it in a way that fits the mood. This wasn't done here. The text was just written in an everyday font with nothing done to it, nothing animated, nothing moody and nothing filmic. It was just there, superimposed randomly onto the images. And honestly, that pretty much killed the film. Same goes for your poster. It's a nice image and then there's this ugly, fat font sitting on it. Sorry to be so blunt, but it really appears as if you completely missed something vital. Go look at posters or movies that have text in them. Study what they do with it and how they integrate it into the visuals. What font they use. Do they have a transition? Where are they placed? For how long? etc. I've seen fonts appearing out of mist, I've seen fonts being placed into images so that the font and the image somehow blended, I've seen fonts roll from numbers, break into pieces, be formed out of smoke, made of rock, superimposed into objects on screen etc etc. There's thousand things you can do other then just slap them on... Another thing I didn't like was the music. It reminded me of old amiga mod files and totally didn't seem to fit the mood of neither the images nor the text. I'd hope you do a new version of the video and complete rethink where you place those fonts. And use another font too.