Garrison (30th Aug 2009 04:18)

You're most welcome. Your humility will take you far... never forget that. We are all learning.

JUIDAR (30th Aug 2009 03:07)

Thank you Garrison I really appreciate how you put your words which what I was really hoping the most for was constructive criticism so thank you very much for that. We all learned a lot from doing this and now that i have a basis for what my next film is going to be somewhat like I can recruit way more help more professional help with things like camera work and framing of shots etc. I have also thought about doing a special short cut version of the film trying to get it snipped way down and I still might do that to see if viewers find the film more enticing. Thanks again!

Garrison (28th Aug 2009 05:36)

First, I can appreciate the time you have taken to make something like this and I can fully understand the challenges. You've often sought out advice from others here (like the DVD box art) in an effort to improve and if you keep that up, you'll go far. Second, I'm not a huge fan of the whole anime/Dragonball Z genre, however, i can appreciate some of the wardrobes you have hear. Now, some stuff that needs improvement: EDITING: This piece is long, and I mean too long. You need and can trim so much in this. I watched it almost all the way through, but i definitely skipped portions because everything FELT dragged out. I would hesitate to guess that this could have been edited down to half the time. Fight scenes (among others) cross the line and are very distracting to what I'm supposed to be watching. CAMERAWORK: The framing and composition of the shots were flat medium or wide shots and any closeups just were not that interesting visually. ACTING: While I can definitely empathize with the lack of good actors, you REALLY need to play to their strengths. You have them talking WAY too much and it exposes their weaknesses. You should have had them speak less. Jubei especially runs on in his sentences, and most of them run on in their sentences. No inflections, just monotone and it's hard to feel invested or care about the characters. SOUND: Sound is okay, but without careful consideration, it can ruin any credibility of a scene. For instance when the fighters are in that "dome" or whatever, they "sound" like they are in some 12' x 12' greenscreened room because there is no depth to the sound. VISUAL EEFECTS: Were okay, but the greenscreen needs work. The exterior 3D future dome where the fights occur look fine but when the other scenes are in someone's basement, it hurts the story a lot. It would have been better IMO to have made it like Highlander where the warriors were just walking the Earth and did battle whereever. I hope this helps as again, I can appreciate your ambition in this.