miker (26th Jan 2007 19:52)

Thanks for the review Klausky. I'll take a look at that 180 degree rule.

Klausky (21st Jan 2007 05:40)

I realize this is a test, so I will cut you some slack. However, when any amateur filmmaker sets out to produce anything he/she must keep some rudimentary concepts in mind. Continuity - Make sure everything matches from cut to cut. Too many times I saw the characters in different positions between cuts. Especially in fights, make sure there are choreographed motions. A huge error I saw was in the final shot. The shot right before shows the character on the right side of the frame, but inthe last shot he is on the left. Read this http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/180_degree_rule to solve the latter problem. Cutting on actions - There were too many unwarranted cuts within this. The chase scenes were fine considering multiple cuts add to the intensity, but some of your cuts made during walking sequences seemed awkward for two reasons. One being cutting at the wrong point and, two, having conflicting screen direction (which I will get into later). By cutting on an action or right before an action occurs, for instance turning the head while walking, a seamless transition is made from shot to shot. The viewer doesn't notice the cut because he is focused on the completed action. Screen Direction - With all these walking/ running sequences, make sure you have the character moving in the same direction as you switch angles. This doesn't really apply to the first chase scene because it was your goal to make it chaotic, but when looking at the stealth scene in the house, the lack of screen direction annoyed me. A real good example of this mistake can be seen when the "bad guy" is looking down at the house right after the other character has made his way past the garage. In the shot where we see the back of the bad guys head, he is moving left to right across the frame. But in the next shot he is moving right to left. Believe it or not, this difference disrupts the flow and rythm to your movie. The 180 Degree Rule will fix this also.

miker (8th Jan 2007 22:12)

A new mirror link has been posted, hosted by TimmyD (thanks Timmy). Hopefully this will fix the slow download problems. Thanks again to everyone for taking the time to review this.